Well that was my favorite. The "girl detective". I hate those stories.

Perfect.

haha! so funny! keep updating!

Freakin funny!
Write on!!

More, please. :D

Hahaha that's pretty good! Certainly made me chuckle =]
I especially like the descriptions, like "orange and gold, like a diamond on fire"
Keep up the good work!

What made you decide to continue?

Oh well, either way I liked this one a lot better than the first chapter for some reason, although I wish I could tell you why.

-snerk- Poor Tom. I feel really sorry for him. Jobs as rutine-attached as those often get on your brains, don't they? For some sick reason, though...I was giggling at the end.

"Opsies!"

Here I am!

Very humorous, I liked it. Amusing, made me giggle. I like how you overlap her writing, her fantasy and the reality all together. Worth a great giggle, thanks so much.

ooh, nice story. i like the use of italics too!

That was hilarious but you could have added more to it.

LOL. Awesome. Seriously. HAhaha. I love this.

I can say, as a former cashier/bagger, that old women are one of the few things I didn't make love to on a conveyor belt.

The last line almost redeemed what was pretty much a predictable romantic fantasy comedy story.

Heheh. I like it I like it a lot. It's a real shame these Harlequin Romances don't happen in real life... Then again, while the whole "getting a man" deal would be far easier, the world would suddenly become even more complex with all of the bloody love triangles!
Nice work.
Erisah

Loved every line of it!

Although I am somewhat confused as to if she was reading a romance novel about love in the check-out lane, or if the check-out lane situation was simply going on in her head.

Either way, it was excellent.