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| XxXPsychic MoonXxX 2008-05-28 ch 1,   | I've never seen any of Hopper's paintings, but after reading this I plan on examining it myself. Great story; I like the plot, even though it was one chapter. You know, all hope is lost and then some cheery people come along and change everything. Those stories rock, since it shows that this world is too dark and dreary and angry, and it needs something to lighten it up. |
| Wherrtle Smyth 2007-04-15 ch 1, | I've seen that painting before! But i don't remember the people in it looking all that happy... but taking liberty with things is what's in these days. I liked it, it kind of had a dated feel, like the painting, with a kind of prevailing sorrowful mood with some zesty stuff thrown in... i've begun to lose interest in what i'm saying. it's been a while, brah... i haven't been to the site in a while but i see you've kept busy... i saw your band page- you guys sound amazing and i wish i could go to one of your shows but i live on the other side of the US. :( But seriously, keep up the good work and always remember to take a deep breath and chillax... -Mr. Smyth aka Misterfuzzums |
| Trilock 2007-04-01 ch 1, | I like the "observant" quality of this. The writing is clear and lucid yet I agree with the Maranwe Telrunya when he says that you can't really see the people. But then again, its up to the reader's imagination to fill in the gaps. Long time no see, btw. |
| Maranwe Telrunya 2007-03-22 ch 1, | Very nice descriptive piece. Though, I'm not sure what any of the guys look like, just the girl. I didn't "see" any colors. Just red. I can imagine what the inside of the bar must have looked like, but you didn't use very many color words. I liked the feel of this, though. It was very quiet and sort of secretive. Restful. ~KB |