The best part of this poem was definately the paradox of the last two lines. Definate ouch factor there.

That's really good...sad...but nicely constructed. And the end is perfect; so short and sudden, it makes it all the more moving!

My friend,

I really love the way that you took what you wanted to say and placed it into a beautiful song without sounding too cliche. Keep writing such beautiful stuff! The girl that this is about is very lucky!

Alera
Queen Regent of Darkness and Lust

its good. I have a realy sad point the artist is Three Days Grace.

Ohh . . . that's good that you have it in black and white!

hm... looks like we're both going through fairly similar situations.

as always good job telling it like it is.

... Don't hold back, you can never hold back

"You only lose by holding yourself back."

chinup now : )

Wow...this is really amazing! Yet again, a very good piece of work from you!

Hey Eivind,AWESOME song! It's a really coollove song sort of thing, but it also embrasses the fact that nothing is really certain and that nothing is absolute. Everything takes some thought, even love. Great job!

Hm...I liked it. Yet, I think you can do better (since your so great at writing poems!) I believe your positively exquisite at writing!
~Friend and fan Cruxis Angel AKA Symphoniakid

love it! it flowed well and was not to forced. great job!

So sad... so sweet. LP? Since when do you listen to them? I used to like them a lot...

Hm... This was different. I don't know why, but somehow, it seems as if there's less of you in this piece than in your other work. Still quite nice. Just...different. And I think you meant Three Days Grace instead of Linkin Park.
~Katja