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| Jesse the Storyteller 2008-04-19 ch 1,   | Hmm. Interesting little poem. I like the short, clipped phrases that make up the lines... I don't really understand what you mean by ear noise. I really like this stanza, though... it's the only stanza out of any of them that have something original to say: "Look for myself / In your mad labyrinth / Wandering in / The forest of done" Although, that's not fair, because "You are the anti-sun" was original as well. I like the general overall theme of falling for a guy who is so absolutely not worth your time but yet you can't get away even though you KNOW that it's stupid. I think most people have felt this. -Jesse Behold the review marathon! (link in profile) |
| Twilight Starr 2007-10-21 ch 1, | Interesting song. Good luck with songwriting and life. Have a brilliant day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2007-07-12 ch 1, | as a song, it's clever! lots of good phrases strung about. |
| bitterlyysweetchoco 2007-06-21 ch 1, | LOL I felt this way once. This would be a really good song. I love the third and fifth stanza |
| rira-chan 2007-04-11 ch 1, | i really enjoyed this. good writing! ~rira-chan P.s thanks for your reveiw |
| Raychel the Kiwi 2007-03-23 ch 1, | Ah. Falling for someone we really shouldn't. Boy, do I know that well. -sigh- This was wonderful. It's rare to find a good non-rhyming poem. I know any poem I try to write comes out terrible, unless it rhymes. -favorites- |
| darkling thrush 2007-03-23 ch 1, | i added this to my favorites! i don't know why, but it really struck me. and i guess kinda hit home, too. "falling for ear noise"--i love that. i know how it is to fall for someone you shouldn't... |