Osunale
2007-04-07
ch 1,   | This isn't your strongest piece (but of course when you have poems like 'faint of heart' and 'back to basaltics' with which to compete...): it's not as intensely imagematic, not as purely, slammingly mind-encompassing, yet I'm still impressed by the controlled emotion bursting out of each turn of phrase. The repetitions, 'what i mean to say,' 'your,' ifs and sing/singing/sangs are wonderfully enforcing. I love the use of the freckles at the conclusion - you're giving a story, a love-filling story, that you take away when you reveal a lack of freckles and star-shine. This is beautifully subtle in places, yet very obvious in feeling. It's interesting to see that you're just as capable of conveying meaning with the gentleness of this piece as you are with the intensity of your other work. Nice work. |
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