Aw this is so cute! Gabriel is like this quite, bottom and daniel, this commanding, sweet top =P ironically I'm currently writing a story with the main characters name as Gabe xD only he's the top and his bototms a male witch lol =P ANee way, getting of topic xD love this story, short, but sweet =D keep up the good work!

[So, it’s true, then,” A soft voice ] no comma after true, A = lowercase
[**,” A different] A = lowercase
[“Say something, freak,”] last comma = period
[Pictures, he had many] comma = dash
[“uh… yeah] u = capitol

A lot of typos, but nothing that couldn't be worked out from proofreading it.

Overall, a pretty good piece. You paced the plot out well for a piece of this length and I got a good sense of your characters, particularly Gabriel. Nice work :)

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

aww!! I'm so glad the ending was happy! great writing!

aw, this is a cute but short story. i really think that you should go on with it, if thats possible.

Eh. I liked where it was going.
I thought it was pretty cute and
realistic and wow, a stalker, really?
But then, it all went so fast.
What happened to the virgin dates?
No kissing on the first date.
And man, this guy's been stalking
you for who knows how long and
all that happens is "I like you"
and major make-out session?

To be honest, I really wish the second
half, the confrontation, had been a little
longer, if you understood my rant. That really
was just a rant, nothing against you personally.

Other than that, I really enjoyed it.
Drama always feels like a soap opera.
And who doesn't love a slashy soap? :)

Favorite line: He wished with all his might that his voice actually take his side for once and not cause him humiliation at every moment it got.
Cracked me up! ;D

Great job!
-Dana.

Aw, that was so sweet. I wish there was more. :)

that was really cute.
at first i thought that he had taken the camera and taken a picture or gadriel's slacked jaw expression[:

Ah! No! I wanted to read more! It was getting really good. I think you should make this into a story. I would love to read it. Goodness you have such talent. ^_^ I would love to be able to write the way you do.

aww! that was cute! adorable! i loved it! really sweet.

I liked this. :) Gabriel's characterization was great, especially the way you portrayed him as shy and flinching when Daniel got too close.

Nice one-shot. :D

That was sweet! ;) Good story.

Ah, fluff. I'm currently looking into medication to combat my severe fluff obsession.

And yay for Malexmale! Ha, all my romance ends up malexmale. XD

Perhaps the story might have benefited from a little more character description? I think people would bond more to your characters if you described them physically a bit more. :) just a suggestion though ^.^

Oh, and homophobia (and just bullying in general, actually) is a horrible concept. I love supporting gay rights ^.^

Cheers and thanks for the fluff! It was appreciated!