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| Panchromatic 2007-12-02 ch 1,   | Odd, but odd in a wonderful way. The egg metaphor at the end is both odd and brilliant, and their whole exchange where he's asking her to see some random movie and 'threatens' to kill her is great. I could see it happening in real life, but it's not so prosaic as to make me want to go bury my head in the ground to break the monotony. It's like a slice of life showing the kinds of days that just happen and may or may not mean something. tis good. it did what it should have. |