Ahuh! (Tim Curry Pennywise laughter) I like the chapter title. Very funny. Anyways, this was interesting build-up in the story. Is it just me, or is this a lot shorter than the other chapters? I haven't read this in a while, so I should probably go back and reread it again before I start in. But alas.

Very nice. Leaves the reader confused and desperately wanting, no, needing more. I can't wait for you to continue this and I hope you do soon. Poor Reagan, though. Shows up, gets dropped down an elevator shaft and then gets left behind. Not a good day for anyone. But yar, peace!

-Stewart

I really want to read more, it's quite interesting. Very imaginative, and it definitely plays on my fear of hospitals. And haunted places. And ghosts. And getting injected with who-knows-what. The style reminds me of Stephen King, but that might be from Kingdom Hospital flashbacks. Anyway, great work and I really hope to finish this.

I like this story so far. I can only review the first chapter because the computer won't let me get to the other chapters.

Oh, very cool. I like Reagans feelings of dejections, very interesting to see in a story such as this.

That ghost was creepy. It don't look like Claire is going to make it out of this one alive. And it's a shame that her camera was destroyed, there won't be any proof. I never much liked elevators, they always seemed unsafe.

~SirScott

I don't think she would be able to beat up a ghost. The two guys remind me of Beavis and Butthead, so that kind of takes the edge off what would be a scary story. Claire is likeable than the two boys, she comes across as an arrogant elitist. I hope you finish this story, because it has been pretty entertaining.

~SirScott

Awesome. Very ingaging. You've managed to work alot of mystery into this story. thumbs up.

Woohoo! Now things are getting delightfully creepy. Astoundingly creepy, even. Like I said, so many questions are brought up. A sickness is kind of ruled out, and I'm getting a vague theory about the mental illness, but I won't say a damn thing, as I hate giving stuff away unintentionally.

As always, your grammar and such is pretty flawless. I noticed maybe like, one instance where an apostrophe sould have been used, but I was so into the story I forget where it was... It's still day, isn't it? If that's the case, I would love to see what happens at night. Wow, an old needle. With God knows what in it. Hopefully just old medicine, that can be treated easily. Or perhaps, something else.

Anyways, good luck on your future installments, and Happy Easter, or something.

-Stewart MacDonald

It would freaky to look through a camera and see a person that wasn't there. I liked how you ended the story with a cliffhanger.

~SirScott

I really like this so far.
I would read the rest of it, but I must go to my next class now, so, alas, I will alert it and read later.

I bid you adieu.

Haha, wonderful (Chuck Norris in disguise...). Can't wait to see what will happen. By plotting I meant making the characters do thing to move along the plot that their personality wouldn't allow in real life.

office around her was painted boring white, but the people who walked in didn’t comment on the paint color.

Very nice opening line, it catches intrest. Good descriptions are to be found everywhere, but I didn't find it to be exactly creepy yet, just a slight tingle.


After taking a look down the line of all your stories, it seems that I have become somewhat discouraged about reviewing all of your stuff, so I will be picking random things for a while, give me something to do. :P

The two new characters seem cool. It does make it more interesting for her to have someone to talk to.

~SirScott

Alrighty! First things first, I will get the personal part of my review out of the way. I love it. It's delightfully creepy with it's foreshadowing and the character development. Readers can feel Claire's vibrant personality, as well as the other characters that make an appearance. I'm incredibly intrigued to see how this unfolds.

You throw in some amazing ominous little facts. The doctor in the window, the medical records... It gets the author making predictions to themselves and anxiously awaiting more. From the facts you display in this, I can tell you've done your homework, or are into camera's yourself. That's very good you took the time to do some research. The story is realistic, and when you describe the hospital, you don't just dump it all on the reader, you interrupt the description with actions and other things.

People may complain about the large paragraphs, but screw them. It makes the story seem very professional and realistic. Well, if I may say, from where this is going, it would make a decent screenplay, not to mention a bestselling novel. Keep on chugging, and thanks for giving me something good to read!

-Stewart MacDonald

Love it. Can't wait to hear more. One thing I might mention is that ghost stories tend to boil down into gore-fests or totally cliche haunting episodes, and please try to avoid plotting. Wonderful so far, I'm hooked!