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StarsWatchAsIDance 2008-07-14 ch 2,	I like this story- it's really good so far! Keep up the awesome work! The only thing is that during the dialouge, you don't punctuate correctly, but that's minor. Also, if you could please R&R my story too, I would totally love that.
Elle Winters 9 2008-02-23 ch 13,	since u havnt updated does that mean its the end?? i really hope not, but if it is can u please post it as finished? that way i wont hav to keep checking just to make sure u havnt posted more.
please. 2008-01-09 ch 13,	yeh, just a BIT too long. but please continue i relaly dont want it to end lyk that.
Missy.Insane 2007-12-23 ch 13,	WE WANT MORE! THIS CAN'T BE THE ENDING! if you don't update another chapter me and all the 47 reviewers won't talk to you and hate you for the rest of our lifes, till dead drop us -uh lool
Elle Winters 9 2007-11-06 ch 12,	NOO! thats blackmail! REVIEW PPL REVIEW! NOW! actually i think ur just pulling our legs.. hehhe thats a lot of legs to pull but yes here i am reviewing to save the life of the main character in your story arent i just a generous person? anyway. i want more more more.. please =D your building up the suspense well.. very very slowly and its killing me but yes.. its going to get there! please please update soon! this review is worth 8124215 reviews alredi especially with the length of it and im just rambling now cause most of this isnt even to do with your great story. still i like it and seriously though, you should stop tryin to build it up too much because its starting to sound lyk your dragging it on and thats never good. so yeh keep up with the action! (aka update! im a sly one rnt i?)
Missy.Insane 2007-11-05 ch 12,	update please please please :P
RockMusicFreak 2007-11-04 ch 12,	I really want them to confront each other. Suicide is just too...depressing to read about.
Elle Winters 9 2007-10-08 ch 11,	hmm I just started reading this and though I can make sense of the words I can tell that you haven't bothered editing this at all. still the storyline is interesting, update soon!
Anonymous 2007-10-05 ch 1,	"Danny rolled his eyes at the principal. Why would Danny Murgeons listen to a stupid principal. He would never listen to the stupid principal." LAWL
(very) concerned citizen 2007-10-02 ch 1,	Since you don't seem to have ever passed the fourth grade, I've decided to take it upon myself to educate you in the ways of apostrophes and contractions. When turning the equivalent of "you are" into a contraction (a shortened form of a word or group of words, with the omitted letters often replaced by an apostrophe, as e'er for ever, isn't for is not, dep't for department.) you are only omitting the 'a'. Hence, "you are" becomes "you're" (the apostrophe taking the place of the 'a'). "You're" would be used in a sentence where one is doing something or is something. ex: You're going to the baseball game. You're very obtuse. When referring to one's ownership of something, you use the word 'your'. ex: Your house is white. Your dog is fat. Your grammar is terrible.
Missy.Insane 2007-10-01 ch 11,	I realy enjoyed reading your story! It's awesome and fantastic! kep it up, looking forward for the next chapter :D update soon and please try to make the chapter longer because I'm realy enjoying this story :D! It shall go on my favorite.
madeyes61 2007-09-30 ch 11,	I really enjoy your story so far. It is really well written. Please update soon
Loly Darko 2007-09-30 ch 1,	You've got a lot of typos, for one thing, and I think you're probably already aware of that so I won't list them. If you weren't aware of that, then read your first line. "“ Well, you have to say your sorry.” The girl said." This line is sort of cheesy. You can usually tell who the bullies are, and nobody would tell a bully that. "The girl leaned over and gave him a soft hug." ...why? And later she goes into talk about his soul being lost...? It's sort of strange. She sounds like some religious coot, and I'm guessing you're aiming for a religious girl. So maybe getting rid of her talk about souls would make her seem less creepy..? So far the plot is cute (I dunno why it reminds me a bit of "A Walk to Remember") but those are just some things that make it unbelievable, and since it's a good idea, nothing should be making it unbelievable. :)
False-Facade 2007-06-18 ch 10,	uhho o o oo o ...OFCOUSE I HAAVE 2 REVIEW AGAIN O MAXXELL AND KAT AND DANNY SHE SAID I LOVE AND danny wasnt there ... anyway love the chappter pls update soon dude
Deafgurl's world 2007-06-18 ch 10,	Hey poor katherine...I wonder why she says that to Danny. So danny falls for her is she? I dont understand why Katherine do that herself for Danny. Hurry update soon.

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