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| I.O.K.O 2007-11-27 ch 1,  | abuseIf I'm comprehending this right, the rare use of punctuation and no capitalization has something to do with being a mess (disoriented, etc.)? |
| Camilleta 2007-04-19 ch 1, | abusei love the last two lines... i think i wrote something like that once, but it didn't sound halfway as good lol. anyway, i just love your writing in general, and this is my favorite. and i'll stop being fangirl-like now. xD |
| darkink1991 2007-03-29 ch 1, | abusedude i'm not going to lie you can really really write. very very well. Please tell me you plan to use that skill for something in life because it is enough to make at least a few people very jelious of you for alot of your life. |
| in theory 2007-03-29 ch 1, | abuseYour bio is very..angry. (I mean the bit about pitying and hating..) some interesting points definitely, but harsh. But ** it, harsh is best sometimes. To be perfectly honest the rhyme depressed and chest doesn't feel right (to me), it kinda sticks out when the other rhymes were all much more subtle and less stark. It's not exactly unbearable, just I'm picky about rhyme; just ignore me! I like the last line; it's so simple but if you read through it and around it, it's like you LIKE the pain they give you. Because instead of saying "as much as you," which would probably be the more conventional thing to put, the use of the word "good" implies you like it, really. Masochistic? That subject has always fascinated me. Jack |