well...basically its a good story...nicely plotted...the chracter r developed well...in conclusion a great story...please continue 2 upload more...its getting more interesting and mysterious...

Quite a few grammatical errors, although the action in the story is interesting. Keep up with character development as the events unfold, and avoid plotting (making the characters do things they wouldn't normally do in order o move on the plot or thicken a description, etc.)

This story is getting better by the chapter! Please hurry and update it! Vampire stories are so awesome. I hope Kyosuke, and Kana are going to be 'together' in some way! After all it is a romance novel? Story? Anyway, please hurry and update! :)

Please hurry and update as soon as you can! ASAP! You probably wouldn't care, but I have a liking for Kyosuke :) He sounds like a true anime character. Unless you didn't want him to be then pretend that I didn't write anything:)

I can tell that this is going to be one hell of a story...