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| MaryAuksi 2007-05-05 ch 1,   | ...And my cousin thought HER insomnia is bad... Great story though. |
| King of Kings 2007-04-02 ch 1, | Nice job, well written. You wrote the inner struggle within the character very well...and I enjoyed how you wrote the dream. I've had insomina before (sort of, anyway), and that's why I was drawn to this story. Good job! ;) |
| leylakedi 2007-03-27 ch 1, | Nice, flawlessly written. I was only slightly confused as to why the character would have their alarm beep at every hour...unless they wanted to be rescued from their nightmares that they knew would come at night. I liked how you integrated the dream into the narration; it wasn't like those clichés where the beginning of the story is all a dream and the character wakes up in a cold sweat and then sighs in relief afterwards. In this story I could tell that the real struggle was within the character, with trying to come to terms with their inner self not being as okay as it appears. Keep writing! -L- |