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| CC 2007-06-16 ch 6, | I liked some of the sory but i didn't realy like Evan or Claire. Claire wasn't strong enough and Evan was weak also. Emma was okay but she lacked something. i sorta liked the ending but you could have written it better. Maybe a reread of it? Kelsey, your best friend in the world |
| anna 2007-05-31 ch 6, | You need to write a sequel. The story was really well written. |
| lygophobic lullabies 2007-04-19 ch 6, | I actually really liked the ending! I like the whole plot too, I just think overall you could have taken more time on editing, grammar and such. I also think that you could have spent more time on word choice because sometimes it fell flat. |
| lygophobic lullabies 2007-04-09 ch 5, | I don't like Emma or Evan. Evan was mean to Emma and he's being unfair to Claire, and Emma should have kept the baby, even though she couldn't help it, if the baby had been born she should have kept it. I really only like Claire and Jenny... |
| lygophobic lullabies 2007-04-02 ch 4, | Very good, the only advice I'd give you is to make sure you have the right words and proper grammar because there were a lot of mistakes. |
| lygophobic lullabies 2007-03-30 ch 2, | I just want to know why they broke up... |
| lygophobic lullabies 2007-03-27 ch 1, | I loved it! I really like how you used the standpoint of the high-class South and left a cliffhanger. |