wow... the description of events is excellent and the drama was not too much nor too little. i'm a fan of your works!

-applause- Hell yes! This is what I'm talking about!

I could feel you in this—you definitely enjoyed writing this. I am delighted because I just read an original, captivating, and beautifully eloquent work.

You should be proud of this, William. It is excellent. It makes me wish I could write like that. And usually only published writers make me feel that way.

Finish it soon. I can't wait to see what happens next. In fact, if you don't complete this, I will be deeply saddened. You don't want to sadden me, do you? :p

As far as critiques, I am speechless.