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BregoBeauty 2008-05-07 ch 34,	abuseAwesome chapter! Jonathan's world is really falling apart now! I hope Jim doesn't tell anyone because I don't think things would go so well for him. I do hope Jon comes clean to Meg about what's really going on. Please update soon! :-D
BregoBeauty 2008-04-20 ch 33,	abuseGreat chapter! My head is swimming with all the info! Wow. I can't wait to see how this all comes together! Keep up the excellent work! :-D
KiraLove 2008-04-15 ch 33,	abuseVery good, can't wait to see what will happen with Meg next!!
Arn 2008-03-15 ch 2,	abusePrty good from what I've seen, I like the concept at the prologue that your life is planned out for you the moment your born, though that idea has already been put up a long time ago. I liked the first chapter and descriptions, especially about the guy with the spit, which I thought was kinda amusing. I was a bit confused at the ending, maybe it's just me. I like.
BregoBeauty 2008-03-07 ch 32,	abuseWow, you weren't kidding about a lot happening in this chapter! I'm so sad that Zeke is dead, though I had a sneaking suspiscion that he would die. Johnathan really seems to be coming around to the good side (Yay!) and I do hope that he can use his love for Meg in order to save her from Aloysius and Gregor. I think if anyone could beat this kind of bloodline curse, it would be Meg and Johnathan. It must be horrible for him to know that his father killed his mother and Meg's mother and now just had Meg's grandfather killed. Poor John. Is Nate dead too or does it just seem like he is? It really seems to feel like he's dead, but then again John seems so focused on Zeke, that I'm not entirely sure. This was an excellent chapter, so keep up the brillant work and please, PLEASE update soon! :-D
BregoBeauty 2008-01-27 ch 31,	abuseSorry it took me so long to read this! I hate play week (I was the assistant producer). Wow, so John's mom knew Meg's mom? Neat twist! Another excellent chapter! I'd say more if I wasn't so exhausted. :-D Keep up the amazing work!
deartokyo 2008-01-26 ch 1,	abusesweet. definately reading more soon !
KiraLove 2007-11-28 ch 30,	abuseBeaut-ti-ful. You know, like Hades says it on Hercules. Not that I mean it that way. Oh well. Good chapter. Keep up the good work! --Kira Love
BregoBeauty 2007-11-26 ch 30,	abuseExcellent chapter! I'm at a loss for words. Yay for John and Meg! That's all I think of. Absolutely perfect for them! It fit the mood and everything! Keep up the incredibly amazing work! Please, please update soon! :)
BregoBeauty 2007-11-26 ch 29,	abuseIn response to your reply, I don't think Meg's revelation was too quick. I think it was perfect. She seemed to struggle with it a bit over the past few chapters and it really fit here. Now, for the new chapters! You'll have to forgive me for being slow--NaNoWriMo stole my soul and I have really fallen behind on my reading/reviewing. Once again, I am so impressed by your usage of imagery! It's absolutely fantastic! I love Jonathan's reaction! The pausing, the kind of like "Wait... what?" almost thoughts in his head, makes it appear as he almost didn't dare believe his luck and it just really fit his character. Not to mention how entertaining it was! I also love the interactions between him and Gregor where he's trying to not to behave like a teenager and be a reserved adult and not punch Gregor's lights out (Which Gregor seriously deserves!). Aww... so cute/sweet! The whole Meg and John part at the end. I really feel like I know these characters now. They feel like good friends and I really hope their relationship succeeds. Off to the next chapter now! :-D This one was fantastic!
BregoBeauty 2007-11-13 ch 28,	abuseWow, this was such an intricate chapter that I don't know where to begin. Her braclet and Ekanta's necklace being essentially the same was a nice touch. Yay for Meg, or should I say Mac, admitting her feelings to John. Her emotions are so real and heart-felt that it's hard not to share her pain in this chapter as she struggles with her feelings. This was one of the best chapters I've seen from you! I swear, with each chapter you get better and better at writing! :-D Keep up the excellent work and please udpate soon! :)
BregoBeauty 2007-11-04 ch 27,	abuseExcellent chapter! I can't even think of words to describe it! Anyways, I do hope that John and Meg's relationship works out because I feel like they both really do care about each other. Of course, my mind is thinking that means John has to turn on his father and the company, which means he'll need help from Nate and anyone else he can get on his side and also probably helping Zeke. I think John could do it and if he lost Meg, if he actually did change his ways, he might be able to keep her. I'm rambling... Anywho, please, please update soon! The suspense is so great it's KILLING ME! :-D
BregoBeauty 2007-10-26 ch 26,	abuseExcellent chapter! I'm continually very impressed with this story. The descriptions are so vivid that it's reather easy for me to picture everything. I know I say that a lot, but it's a very tricky thing to do and you do an amazing job with it. That was a neat little twist with her being able to read the card. I guess it was written in the old language of Meg's lineage. I'm so glad she knows about Zeke now. Yay. Please, please update soon! :)
Laeden 2007-10-10 ch 24,	abuseMy first review was prematurely sent. However, what I wanted to say, is there's no comma before "and." A comma followed by a conjuction only separates two sentences. Since Janguars isn't a sentence but rather the last part of a list, there's no comma. You have a few instences of present tense. ", growing solemn as he pushes a stray hair out of my face." Normally past tense is better. Switching from past to present usually isn't a good thing to do. You also have a lot of passive verbs. Try and say more with unique verbs that convay a lot of emotion. Also, another thing I noticed. You describe a few things about a certain area or situation and kind of drop it. Stick with it and really describe what things look like, taste like, feel like, hear like, etc. Use the senses to describe surroundings. I hope things helps a little, ~Laeden
Laeden 2007-10-10 ch 25,	abuseOverall your writing was rather intriguing. I did notice a few things that kind of nerved me a little. First, just to point something out, you have a few grammatical mistakes. "perfectly manicured lines of BMWs, Mercedes Benz, and Jaguars

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