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| Scott 2007-05-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseMore vivid then most of your work. I think it was lacking a bit in information of the location, sometimes it's nice to imagine the area, but I think some details were needed there. Also at the end , "flipped off"? I have no idea what that means but oh well. I think something like slapping the heck out of the poor boy would have been more appriopete. But your the author. :p |
| bex17 2007-03-27 ch 1,  | abuseThis was depressing, very well written, but depressing all the same. great short story though! I loved it. bec |