This was just beautiful. I especially loved the "gurl' part and "grl." I don't know what I could say that other reviewers hadn't already. I was just extremely impressed, yet again, by your writing talent. Superb job.

i don't care if this was meant to be everything but read.
it's amazing.
i love the part about "a gurl with a url".

it's lovely, and creative.
the words rolled off of my tongue. i had to read it out loud quite a few times before i found a rhythm, though.

you are genius. amazing. if i could, i would swallow you whole in hopes of catching and absorbing some of your powers.

i just stumbled upon your writing today and i have to tell you that you impress me like crazy.
i love this piece. this is brilliant.
*favs*

holy ** wow.
the motions of your words are incredible.

i've never seen a poem read at a 'slam' or anything,
but this paints a perfect picture, and i could hear it being read as i thought it.

actually, i have been asked to come perform some poetry of mine
at this little thing downtown with some friends,
but i had no idea what to do because most of my poems aren't meant to be read out loud--most of their thought comes from the line breaks,
but now i know what i will write for it.
thank you so much.

"I’m a disappointment, the scheduled appointment at the abortionist’s clinic
that didn’t show."
--your words say so much. very awesome.

great job. -ty.

This is amazing, I can definitely envision how awesome it would be performed. The part with a "gurl with a url" is my favorite stanza, especially "nihilistically-degendered self."

Cop out review? I think not! ^_~

I don't even know what to say.

I just loved this so much.

I'm yearning to see it preformed, now--if it's this good read, it must be even more amazing the way it was meant to be!

"today I’m a womyn with a Y, with a question of equality, with a lesson in admonition:
I am not the second sex, I am not just x plus x —
man plus womb does not equal justice."

was probably my favorite part of this.

I love how in-your-face this is.

"I have a ** and breasts
instead of a ** and testes —
yes that’s right — I said it."

I had to chuckle there.


I know I've said this before, but this is just amazing.

Beautifully put. It's a war cry.
Another one for the favourites list. I should make a section for you. All your poems are so enthralling. You're the only poet on this entire site whose poetry I read and feel this invigorated.

Today, I think I was a lady.

I've never read a slam poem though but to me, this was perfection. Your descriptions, and the imagery, and the way the lines flow, just leave me speechless. What you say is true too, I feel like a different person everyday. Take care.

Wow, I really liked this and the idea of it, too. It flows really well when I was reading it aloud, even if it doesn't continually rhyme or whatnot. Especially like the first three verses. Haven't seen many Slam performances, so I can't exactly give constructive crit. but I think this was definitely very powerful.

Definitely very powerful. I haven't read much slam, so this is a bit different from what I /have/ read.

I like where you added rhyming/assonance in just the right places.

'shopping deals'. Hm. That puts the picture in my mind that you are trying to find a bunch of sales. Perhaps I am wrong, but from my experience those ladies love to brag about just how expensive it was, and that /they/ were able to pay for it, no sweat off their slender backs.

Yeah that's all I could find to critique. >.> Your poetry is fantastic.

really like the grittiness and intensity of this, as well as how you show all the facets of women. I'm not very familiar with slam poetry so I can't offer much of a critique, but this was definitely powerful and resonant. cheers.