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| RPGmastar 2007-04-22 ch 1,  | abuseQuestion: Is Koji in this? Email me back. |
| FugitiveGirl 2007-03-31 ch 1, | abuseI kinda wanna know more about Shadow.. The dialogue between Shadow and Asuna seems a bit stiff to me, I think you need to put something to differentiate between Asuna and Shadow's speech. Something like dialect, or an accent would do it. =) Looking forward to your next chapter. |