Reviews for A Presence Unknown

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miss-blackhair 2007-12-05 ch 6,	im a sucker for supernatural stories. this one's pretty cool.
Lavi R 2007-08-26 ch 21,	I know, I know, I didn't review in a long time... You see, just when I was about to review, an alien ship came up in front of my house and abducted me, after doing various tests, (they were very hard and had to do with math...and there was a bit physics in there as well) they erased my short term memory, there fore making me forget about your story. Now you might be wondering how I am able to remeber all this but...hey hehe look at the time...hehe...looks sideways... um...runs away... ... is escorted back by all the charaters of Vesta's story... Hikaru: Review you dolt! Lavi: fine fine don't get your underwear in a bunch so anyways here is your review... ... the review!! this is a very funny chapter... "“What a dumb ** name,” Akane muttered." I love this line I can't get over it! I love the title of the chapter too... the legal drinking age! hahahaa I love the playful banter between Akane and Mario, And the things that happened on the ice rink between Michiko and Akane are downright hilarious! (and seems like stuff that would happen to us!) Michiko like Mario? I thought she liked Akira and speaking of which, what happened to him? My favourite character in this story is Akane! she is so extremely cute! (reminds me of someone looks pointedly at vesta oh and btw here is a mistake i picked up on... "Akane was holding Hikaru’s hand, which was holding Manami’s, which was holding Rini’s, which was holding Michiko’s" instead of which, shouldn't you say "who" like this: Akane was holding Hikaru’s hand, "who" was holding Manami’s, "who" was holding Rini’s, "who" was holding Michiko’s you asked for a long review so here it is!! bye bye... see you soon!! :D
Carmel March 2007-08-16 ch 21,	Lovely, lovely chapter. I loved the fluffy, romantic parts :) Keep up the super amazing work, and update soon! ~Carm~ PS I saw the title to this chapter and laughed for about five minutes :D
Susannah Simon 2007-08-15 ch 21,	aww filler chapter :D that's ok though. it was well-written! although the ice-rink part where they were all skating around got a little confusing. you know, when they were bumping into people and stuff. the beginning was nice though!! angelina...hmm... it was kinda anti-climactic when they went to the ice rink right after though! i was waiting for them to go on some kind of adventure right away! but they were like "let's go ice-skating!" hahaha. i like the romantic side-story though. it keeps the ball rolling. :D post soon!! i love reading your stuff.
Lavi R 2007-07-24 ch 20,	That BLonde haired son of a *!! WOOT WOOT!! luv that line!! btw, "infuriatingly patiently" should be infuriatingly patient lol you put two "ly" together Loving this story!! P.S Sorry I didn't review this sooner...I had a choice between this and Harry Potter (i think we both know what I chose) I finished it btw anyways... update soon or I will come after you with a bucket of spoilt pig's milk... lol Luv ~LaVi~*
Carmel March 2007-07-24 ch 20,	:D That smiley face is what my face looks like right now. Great, great chapter. I'm hooked on this story. Update soon! ~carm~
Susannah Simon 2007-07-23 ch 20,	gah...confusion. blond haired guy. who is that? am i supposed to know now? or are you going to clarify later... and why does she say that takashi is 'nothing'? gaah. haha i guess i'm not supposed to know all of this now. i guess you'll say explain it in the next chapter. which will be posted soon, i hope. :) i'll be here...reviewing...forever... haha luv, susannah
Lavi R 2007-07-12 ch 19,	It was funny Hikaru squealed!! Cause you never really think of guys as squealers!! And Akane just fully blurted out that Hikaru is psychic!! lol Well good chapter!! Story is getting really interesting! :D ~LaVi~
Carmel March 2007-07-11 ch 19,	Ha! I love how Akane just blurted out that Haru was telepathic :) Fantastico chapitro [that is not a real language :)] Good pace on the dialogue. Hope to read more of this really soon! ~carm~
Susannah Simon 2007-07-11 ch 19,	haha good chapter! aw i wanted to interrogate the voice... i love how akane just randomly burst out hikaru's secret. haha! i wonder how he's going to react... it's great how you love "what will become?". i really like that one too. but don't let this one go! i need to find out how it ends! keep posting with this story and "what will become?"! you're a great writer. post soon! luv, susannah
Susannah Simon 2007-07-09 ch 18,	haha they're hearing voices! haha. i wonder if the woman will help them get rid of the presence... can't wait to find out! oh, can you message me a list of characters? i always forget which ones are boys and which ones are girls. and which two like each other? well, the girl likes the boy, but i don't remember which two... thanks! nice chapter, by the way. i like how you conveyed their emotions in the dialogue.
Lavi R 2007-07-06 ch 18,	OH! the story id getting really really interesting! lol I can't wait for the next chapter ! :D
Carmel March 2007-07-05 ch 18,	Ah, I know I've already told you this, but the way you balance the narration and description with dialogue is an absolute wonder. It reads so naturally, so smoothly. Great chapter, and I hope to read more really really soon :) ~carm~
Lavi R 2007-06-26 ch 17,	I was reading this chapter and i was like: Didn't you put this up already?? lol but yeah then i remembered that you sent it to me... lol :D yeps... all cliff hangarish... I think u sent me 18 sho um i am not that mad at you but you have to make longer chapters...actually never mind since you update really fast... lol so nvm wut i said
Carmel March 2007-06-26 ch 17,	As always, absolutely wonderful chapter. And, as always, you left us readers hanging! I loved it, though :) Can't wait for the next chapter! ~carm~ PS Thanks for the review :) How long have I written? Well, that is my first and only story so far. How long have you been writing?

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