 Icyfire4w5 2009-06-09 . chapter 1Woah, I feel so sorry for this guy. He kinda reminds me of the Devil. Great poem. |
 Captured Dawn 2009-05-31 . chapter 1Hah, sad but true, I think I have met a few (too many!) of these 'incomplete lovers' in my life so far.
Well written as usual Miss Mozell.
Brilliant stuff. |
 harumpha 2007-12-26 . chapter 1 This poem made me grin wryly. I love the "he's such and such but this and that." The contradictions helps with the imagery of the character in more depth. I especially admire how you were able to rhyme and yet keep the point of the poem there. Very nice; it shows an experienced writer.
My favorite lines must have to be: "He tells you that he's single/ though he wears a wedding ring."
Great job at capturing the ideal man with his imperfections that women tend to gloss over for the sake of their "true love". ^-^ |
 emerald 2007-03-29 . chapter 1 *wry smile* Good job. Good characterization. |
 Ashelin 2007-03-28 . chapter 1This was sad, and it flowed really well. I loved how it wasn't really a story, but you didn't just bundle things together in a weird way. Great job. |