Ok first off, you dont have any punctuation, which is great, good job never start. Second, its awesome,I really like it. Some of the rhymes [man I cant even spell rhyme anymore, its been awhile] are a bit elementary, which is fine cause they still work well. So good job keep up the good work.

I could have sworn I reviewed this already. FictionPress is driving up the wall.

Anyhow, nicely done.

Rowan.