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| helixdown 2008-03-06 ch 2,  | abusegood, but before i continue, what does HIATUS mean? And what music are you talking about? I'm so confused! (The PM you sent me) |
| SketchThySoul 2007-12-05 ch 13, | abuseHey nice you edited those details on zyra, shweet |
| kayoko101 2007-12-04 ch 13, | abuseSo...now Syn has two people that he has to fight? In this time, has he mastered that new ability?? I'm just a litle confused about the timeline... ANYWAY ! aside from that, that was good. Can't wait to see how this turns out... |
| SketchThySoul 2007-12-04 ch 1, | abuseZyra's gonna kick syn's ass! |
| don't need to know 2007-12-03 ch 13, anon. | abuseNot bad, could use some work, but hey, you're trying aren't you? That's what counts. |
| helixdown 2007-12-03 ch 1, | abuseWOW, way to kick off a story, good, very good, but all the italics are repeated, for instance, you put the crimson description paragraph twice, along with shadow, and everything else in italics twice, but it was good, I'll try to read more when I can. Buh-bye! from a fellow writer ~helixdown |
| kayoko101 2007-12-03 ch 12, | abuseOH whats the cloud ?? hm ? hm ? (sorry im hyper) This is AWESOME! i love how the two are both trying to get strong for the other ,and the fact that their stories are intertwined. tis awesome !! XD Update son !! XD |
| SketchThySoul 2007-12-02 ch 11, | abusegreat job buddy, i like the contrast between lightheartedness and ruthless war scenes |
| kayoko101 2007-11-27 ch 11, | abuseDuDe!! I love this story ! the title's ... well ... lets call it decieving ... anywho, update soon. Bye! |
| Haseo21 2007-06-03 ch 6, | abuseA short chapter but a very good one! Syn is an interesting character and his interactions with Keiko just deepen his mysticism. I'm interested to see what happens next between them! |
| Haseo21 2007-05-23 ch 5, | abuseWow, when Syn lets his inner bloodlust out there is no stopping him. Such brutality in his killings. But what's going to happen now that Keiko watched that horrific fight? I must know! |
| JerseySpirit 2007-04-15 ch 1, anon. | abusevery good story |
| Haseo21 2007-04-07 ch 2, | abuseI like the story and characters so far. The contrast between the war battle in the prologue and the simple pace of Chapter one is nice. |