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| dragonflydreamer 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abuseReviewing for the Review Marathon! (link in profile) I like how I got a good feel for your characters. You balanced it out information about them between action and dialogue and didn't weigh the writing down with unnecessary description. I didn't like the chopy style of this. It told little about the setting and, to be frank, was a bit annoying after a while. It was an intersting read :) |
| Lollyst 2008-06-29 ch 1, | abuseWow, this was very entertaining. :) I liked it because it was short and concise, and you could still tell what was happening in minor detail. I also like her rather ADD personality and those little notes about what's she's thinking...because, frankly, that's how I think. :D I don't really have anything I dislike in this small story, actually. It was sort of vague, but that might have been intentional. Hope you keep up your unique work! -for the Review Game |
| cucumbers 2007-04-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseLol. That was adorable. : ) |
| Cortney 2007-04-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseLOVE it! You didn't need a whole lot of dialogue to get your point across, yet the story was still well-written. Great job! |
| Kailum 2007-04-01 ch 1, | abuseHaha amusing xP I think the style of writing suits this sorta one-shot. I'd like to know what happens, but it seems nice just like this ^_^ |