lol! I loved it!

Reviewing for the Review Marathon! (link in profile)

I like how I got a good feel for your characters. You balanced it out information about them between action and dialogue and didn't weigh the writing down with unnecessary description.

I didn't like the chopy style of this. It told little about the setting and, to be frank, was a bit annoying after a while.

It was an intersting read :)

Wow, this was very entertaining. :)
I liked it because it was short and concise, and you could still tell what was happening in minor detail. I also like her rather ADD personality and those little notes about what's she's thinking...because, frankly, that's how I think.
:D I don't really have anything I dislike in this small story, actually. It was sort of vague, but that might have been intentional.
Hope you keep up your unique work!

-for the Review Game

Lol. That was adorable. : )

LOVE it! You didn't need a whole lot of dialogue to get your point across, yet the story was still well-written.

Great job!

Haha amusing xP I think the style of writing suits this sorta one-shot. I'd like to know what happens, but it seems nice just like this ^_^