Reviews for We Fall Out of Place

Reviews For: We Fall Out of Place

silver-eyed-elf 2007-09-07 ch 1,	Oh, this is so true. As with your "rusty apartment" poem, you make observations that most people overlook. "Setting a horrible, artistic example" was personally my favourite line.
drippingdreams 2007-05-03 ch 1,	I feel bad for not having R/Red this yet... I hadn't even read it yet! [Just wait till you get to the last two months of your senior year of high school, and then you'll sympathize & realize why.] But that's not really an excuse, so I guess instead of continuing in that direction, I'll diverge and say: Thank you. On a less rambly note: My favourite lines, because you know how I love listing favourite lines, are "We fall out of place;" "We slip out of line, slip out of time;" "we leave the marks of our shoes for the janitor to clean up." I'm also fond of "we smart-aleck and smirk and roll our eyes," just because it's got that rhythm, it's got a hint of assonance and a stir of consonance. And it's a fabulous image. So, this means you're graduating from primary school? Amazing. I was a totally crap writer when I was 10 or 11. I think my idea of a good simile was "health class was like a warm blanket, comforting me when I cried." YEAH. I SUCKED. But you, my dear, are going to change the world. Keep on. Much love.
Adrian Brodskiey 2007-04-02 ch 1,	OMG! I loved it! I hope you had told me and we could have talked about this! I LOVED IT!
no.holding.back.the.crooked 2007-03-29 ch 1,	That was so nice. I love the line "we are bending the straight lines". Ah, so lovely~! :D

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