I don't know how you are about commenting on the writing and telling you any mistakes, so I'll refrain from doing that, since I don't know how you would take it.

This poem makes sense, touches on human emotions a great deal. You seem to stress a rhyme scheme a little too hard and it throws off the rhythm a bit, but over all it looks good and you've got a solid subject too! Keep writing!

This is pretty cool.
I like it.