Reviews for Magic's Chosen One

annihilator of the faceless 2007-10-07 ch 1,	abuseThe main character's perspective is really intriguing and unusual--it's not every day that one who supposedly is in power is portrayed as lost. You should definitely expand on this, as it would be interesting to know more about the background of the story. I really liked this!
Nemonus 2007-04-02 ch 1,	abusePretty good. Your words are fine. The story is illustrated about the choice and about the "gifts" well. I'd like to see what the "dreams" of the narrator are, that they are so important and that being the Chosen One interferes with them so horribly much. For what it is, I don't think the poem needs much more editing. One confusion: how is "My sanity " at stake? That would explain his/her character better. The narrator sounds like a selfish, imaginationless kid to me. I can't read stories where someone like that gets the adventure. They don't deserve it, when others pine so badly for it.
Yourbutt 2007-03-30 ch 1,	abusenice, interesting concept! um, I think in the first stanza you should use the word gave, instead of give...I dunno it sounds more natural to me. I also think you should do something about the flight and night words, cause they sound like your rhyming, when you really aren't. Maybe use different words or switch around the lines in the stanza? I like the thoughts in it! It's cool!