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| the sacred night 2007-04-03 ch 1, | You're so funny. Actually it fits really well, because sonnets are supposed to have a twist at the end. Or English sonnets are. Italian sonnets have it around lines 8 and 9, and I don't know about Petrarchan sonnets, since the only time I read them is when English sonnets are based on them. |
| Venustas iaceo 2007-04-01 ch 1, | Oh my gosh, candelabra DOES rhyme with chupacabra. That's pretty amusing. I was watching a show on chupacabras today, haha. Cows with missing utters and what not. That was pretty awesome, despite the (for you?) which seemed awkward, really. And breaking scheme? Fahh. Not to worry - you're a modern writer. They're supposed to be abstract (but often fail miserably). Plus, you have it about goat sucker. What's not cool about a goat sucker? It's a million times better than say... a yeti. What's 'knock-kneed' fright? Where you can't move? I'm curious. Wow, this is a really crappy review. I apologize for that... I usually don't suck (I think). |
| Catseye*Rose 2007-03-31 ch 1, | Hehe, that last line is so cute ^_^ Very nicely written :P |
| Piko-chan 2007-03-30 ch 1, | I like it a lot too! Good job. |
| Rachelmorph 2007-03-30 ch 1, | You're nifty darling, but also slightly disturbed. |