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Reviews For: Stage tears aren't fake at all

PrincessPeaches
2008-03-02
ch 1,
abuseThis is a great idea...
I can imagine is being true for people too :(
Unready
2007-06-30
ch 1,
abuseI don't quite get the meaning of this, its sort of ambiguous.
fusillade
2007-04-14
ch 1,
abuseIt seems like it's simply prose with random line breaks. As a poem, it's not that good. As prose, it has merit. Edit it a bit, take out unnecessary words, and as a poem it would be rather good too.
JesykaStoryTeller
2007-03-31
ch 1,
abuseWow, thats good. I liked it.
effervescent-sentiments
2007-03-31
ch 1,
abuseI liked it, you portrayed your feelings well.

It's in need of some review punctuation-wise, which would then clear up some of the choppiness.

Also, you could condense some of the lines into shorter, more witty, phrases.

Overall, good job. I love the premise.

-Dev.
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