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| AMM3485 2008-05-12 ch 5,   | I like the premise, but I am finding it really hard to follow. |
| Notanymoreitsnot 2008-01-02 ch 16, | Not perfectly written, but still incredibly cute (the good smile making cute, not the patronising head patting sort) The ending made me smile loads and Caroline's character and family made it less clique |
| Anti-inflammatory 2007-12-13 ch 16, | A little cliched...but cute. Lol |
| insanity-ward 2007-12-08 ch 16, | aw! that was such a cute story!! i luved it! it was unbelievably sweet! |
| makexmexspin 2007-12-07 ch 16, | lol that was beyond cliche! and you had a lot of mistakes. but i like sapiness. so watever. :D |
| ipanema 2007-07-13 ch 14, | that was kind of a lame way to end the chapter... still i like caroline, its a cool character! |
| A Friend 2007-06-16 ch 13, | No they can't break up they have to get back together. Sean likes Caroline right? She just doesn't know how to deal with her feelings! |
| makexmexspin 2007-06-15 ch 13, | God, I love this story! YOu think one things going to happen then another thing happens! I love the random twists. Oh and you write are instead of our alot. |
| blondiexoxo 2007-05-02 ch 9, | hey i really like this story..its cute and funny i like it (duh) |
| the truth 2007-04-28 ch 1, | you really need to work on making the story more cohesive within the chapters. you give too much detail on insignificant things, and skip other information. the phrasing is incredibly awkward. plan, read a bit more widely perhaps and get a beta reader. |
| KungFuDuckie-x3 2007-04-17 ch 7, | oh this is getting good I feel sorry for her grandmother she died she seemed so freindly and cheerful not right to be lost. Beccax |
| Etherelda 2007-04-16 ch 7, | Well, now I know why Caroline needs a therapist...! |
| KB 2007-04-16 ch 7, | wow. well white isnt a very iteresting color anyway! update real quick like please |
| bitterdeath 2007-04-14 ch 6, | This is a pretty awesome story and i can't wait for the next update. |
| Etherelda 2007-04-13 ch 6, | There's a kind of unexpectedness about this Chapter; anyway nice chapter and hope you can update soon! |