| Reviews for Two Suits |
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ShaniaWrites 10/18/12 . chapter 1I like the beginning of the piece. It shows a lot about Kian in that he easily becomes nervous. However for now I want to talk about the end scene, my personal favourite part of this piece. I like that Erick is not direct that he is asking Kian on a date, but not completely indirect either. Kian's pondering for a few seconds is also quite a nice device, as having him unsure allows the reader inside his mind and for him to seem somewhat real. |
Shania 9/12/12 . chapter 1 Cuuuuutteee! |
ImmanenceEnsured 4/23/12 . chapter 1This was awesome, really. I really appreciate these cute, K- to T-rated stories that aren't too decadent, wild or illogical for me to lose my appetite (or morals). This was sweet and just the right length. Thank you! |
Kat 2/7/12 . chapter 1 Is there more...? There has to be more. You left a cliffhanger. Overall, though, it was a nice read. |
TomatoesAndPasta 7/18/11 . chapter 1Loved the story, love the way you write. :) And I absolutely love the water-cooler scene, it was hilarious. The story is really realistic and it has a calm feeling to it. At the same time it's detailed enough for the reader to see everything in his/her mind it still leaves room for your own imagination. You also ended it in a way that it did not seem unfinished, which many authors have a big problem with when they stop at that type of place in a story. Good work! |
Chatte-Rouge 12/9/10 . chapter 1Lol water cooler talk! Love the storyline xD |
Madame Penguin 8/16/10 . chapter 1Aw, this has to be one of the sweetest stories I have read on here. There wasn't any real action in this but I love the cuteness and how flirtatious this turned out to be. A 10 out of a 10 |
NoAccount-Deleted 1/20/10 . chapter 1Wow! This story is very well written. I like the style of writing; it is down to earth and realistic. I enjoyed reading this chapter. The syntax and formatting are great. I didn't find any spelling or punctuation errors. If the proceeding chapters are written as well as this one, I think this story would make an excellent television series along the lines of "Sex and the City" for instance. I look forward to reading more. P.S. Will you critique my story, "Jump to It"? I would love to have your "expert" opinion. :) |
frogs of war 5/10/09 . chapter 1That was so sweet. And we know that they get together as they are mentioned in another story. |
gumdropspimp 10/31/08 . chapter 1I love how subtle it is :D |
notauseryetxD 10/21/08 . chapter 1 very very cute! i liked it a lot, along with your writing style which is very smooth and easy to read. luvs it. |
legodaynuhxx 8/20/08 . chapter 1Oh, dear Lord! That was spectacular. Your writing is seriously superb. It's so nice to read and understandable, with near-perfect grammar and punctuation. And the story line? My goodness, the story line. What a wonderful view of their friendship. And the dialogue was always a blast to read. Wow, this story was simply amazing. Great job. I love this. :) -Dana. |
Cattails 8/3/08 . chapter 1Aha! I knew I'd find the one that had Kian and Erick in it! XD It was sweetly adorable. |
Apnoea 6/14/08 . chapter 1Aw, cute. ;) |
phangirl27 12/22/07 . chapter 1You know you could make this a longer story *hinthint*. Even so I like it how it is, I am particularly fond of the characters. Good Job! _ phangirl _ |