Whoa... I love them... A lot...


The second one was really really great.. Sad, but that's one of the main things that make short stories so good..

The first one was a little bit hard to read, there were a bunch of spelling/grammer mistakes, but that can be fixed.

The second story was emotional, and pretty.

Rowan.

I'm going to put two reviews in one... For the first story: I liked it very much. The ending was a bit surprising, but I liked the way it turned out. Your descriptions were clear, making it easy to believe I was there, standing next to the cows that killed my father laughing in a fit of hysterics. A very well written piece!

For the second story:
Short, but you managed to say all that needed to be said. The emotion is strong, and you created a very powerful piece! I liked this ending as well. Well done!

""Cattle?" she asked, her brow crumpling."

I wouldn't say "crumpling."

Not rosy lips.

"days of plucking her nose, hovering above manure"

PLUGGING her nose.

Before he had been stampeded?

You have lots of thumb twiddling- consider something else.

The ending was pretty weak... but I liked the overall premise.

Nice job- keep writing.

Dev.