Reviews for Cupids Apprentice

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Saved By Blood 2007-12-24 ch 7,	abuseI don't know where this is going just yet, but I like it. You left off the last two letters of "eternity" at the very end of this chapter by the way. It says "eterni", which I don't think is a word. lol. jk, but you should take a look at it. I know he's kinda the bad guy, but I like Michael. He's all old-fashioned and gentlemanly, and I'm a sucker for guys like that. And hey, if you get the time, would you check out my story? I'd love it if you could give me some feedback.
Carmel March 2007-12-05 ch 7,	abuseThat was amazingly amazing. Even though it's been awhile since I've set eyes on this story (about which I am terribly sorry about!), I immediately got right back into it the moment I started reading. This story keeps getting deeper and even more interesting. Keep up this wonderful work, and I'm looking forward to reading more :) ~Carm~
angeleyez61888 2007-11-22 ch 7,	abuseThis was a really good chapter i enjoyed it
Saved By Blood 2007-11-02 ch 6,	abuseCrazy. So she still loves Michael, right? And I think he still loves her... it seems like if he hadn't mutated into a monster when they were alive, they might have had a happy ending. Sweet. Update soon!
Saved By Blood 2007-11-02 ch 5,	abuseI hate Alex. Freakin perv. Is the choice really between him and Mike for the guy Mari falls for? Because neither of them are very likable. It was a little gratifying to see Mari torture Mike by going off with Alex, though. Kind of expressing her as an individual. Again, nice.
Saved By Blood 2007-11-02 ch 4,	abuseThis was hastily written. Grammatical errors alway distract from the feeling of the story, so it's important! Proofreading is always worth the extra time. So, that's how she died. She killed herself for a stupid guy. Huh. She better not take him back! No way! So, is he still a vampire in the afterlife, or is he just like her? Not really human, but not really anything else either, just dead? It'll be interesting to see how this plays out.
Saved By Blood 2007-11-02 ch 3,	abuseWhoa, mad twist. Nice, though, very nice, adding in vampires. They can spice up almost any story, after all. And the whole ex-boyfriend thing... Again, watch for those homonyms. Also keep an eye out for words with missing letters and sentences with missing words. Everyone does it, but it's so easy to fix. Good job, though.
Saved By Blood 2007-11-02 ch 2,	abuseWatch your homonyms. You're getting them seriously mixed up. Might I suggest more careful proofreading? Anyway, still good.
Saved By Blood 2007-11-02 ch 1,	abuseThis is interesting. I love how Mari is all rude to Cupid. Everyone sees Cupid as this cute little baby in a diaper. Never thought to make him a jerk. Nice touch! You put "your" when it should have been "you're" and put "horse" when it should have been "hours" but good job anyway. I'm too lazy to go back and check where, though. It's, like, midnight. I'm tired. So sorry I can't be more specific. Still, I'm reading chapter 2!
Carmel March 2007-05-18 ch 6,	abuseHeya...I'm so sorry I haven't reviewed sooner! I've just been away from the computer for the past few days. But I'm here now, and that's what counts, right? :) You've done an absolutely amazing job with this chapter. Everything fits, everything flows, every line is well written, planned. I love it. I hope you update soon! ~carm~
Moni Jane 2007-05-15 ch 6,	abusewow! I really liked this chapter! very wellwritten! may good writings continue to you. ~Moni Jane
angeleyez61888 2007-05-15 ch 6,	abuseAwesome chapter and very intersting i can't wait to see what comes next. :)
Pieces of the sun 2007-05-15 ch 6,	abuseMike a freaak...I feel sorry for Mari. Tis quite sad, the situation she is in. You haven't updated in a while, I miss this story. Please updat soon!
elisefey 2007-05-14 ch 1,	abuseLOL! This is a great premise! So much fun. :) I like how Marissa is not keen on her job as Cupid's apprentice.
Carmel March 2007-05-10 ch 5,	abuseOh, wow, I love this story, too! The characters are incredibly well portrayed :) Good job on this story! I can't wait for more. ~carm~

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