Reviews for Growing Up in Secondary School

Reviews For: Growing Up in Secondary School

leylakedi 2007-04-02 ch 1,	General essay seems to be a good category for this (what you've already put it under). You could always change the topic or genre or whatever to "life" or something similar. I often have trouble deciding what category my stories are in, so i put "general" a lot, which I think is fine. Your writing style is fluid and interesting, even though the subject matter of the essay was not of a particular interest to me. Since i'm pretty sure we live in different countries with different school systems, it might have been beneficial to include more explanation about your school system. (like what S1 means or how long you stay in secondary school, etc). I wasn't so confused that i didn't enjoy reading it, however. One small grammar thing: "I think everything depends on your attitude towards life. Whether you want to be successful in life ..." You probably want to put a comma instead of a period between those two clauses. I think the second one is a fragment. (this was probably a small oversight) all in all, keep up the writing, you have talent. -L- P.S. thanks for reviewing so many of my stories!
Formerly 2007-04-02 ch 1,	Yes, homework diary checks are very meaningful.
Black Alya Wolf 2007-04-01 ch 1,	You did good with the category, and I totally agree with your views, even though I'm American: I'll be going to high school in a few months, not secondary. Learning definitely takes the front seat of my life, because I'll need to survive out there on my own; everything else either doesn't matter at all or is simply tossed in the back. Unfortunately for me, the same goes with relationships, platonic or otherwise :) but I'm working on that, slowly. Your writing is very fluent. It's not too detailed, but it's not dull, either. You show interest and something of a passion in the subject at hand, you don't veer off topic, and you use good words that aren't too fancy but show that you're not a dunce. In the very first sentence, "You look good first year," there should be a comma between 'good' and 'first'. The sixth (or fifth, if you don't count the first one) paragraph could probably be separated into two; I think you got a little carried away. But other than that, it's all good! I always tell myself to push harder, no matter how hard I DO push. If I get all 100's on tests, I want extra credit anyway. If I can do double-digit multiplication in my head, I want to do triple-digit and beyond. Those individuals stupid enough to not learn all they can while they can are merely cheating themselves of a full and happy life.

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