Reviews for Pages Of Nightmare

Reviews For: Pages Of Nightmare

RedWheeler 2008-06-24 ch 6,	Cliffhanger. XP Well, I finished school today and Shawn is working nights so I figured I would get some readomg done. As of now, I don't know if I can get to Revolver tonight. But maybe I can, I guess we never know. Er... well you will if you get more than one email from me I guess. Moving on, it only took a minute for me to realize where the last chapter had left off. So all is good, since I am rather forgetful as of late. Looks like things are picking up for the plotline, and the whole confrontation at the end I thought was the best part of the chapter. I especially liked how everyone's opinions clashed together instead of heading for one single thought, if you know what I mean. I can tell that you're working on those punctual grammar errors though, I really only saw a single your/you're confusion. And it was... "... shut you're fucking mouth!" Which will be starred out most likely due to content. That's the kind of things I do, in an attempt to make them correct, I do the opposite. XP Other than that... I saw like one time where the was repeated twice in a row. Oh and the phrase: "Looks a good sword," sounds a little weird to me personally. I think it sounds like it's missing a word, but I wasn't sure if it was intentional or not since it was dialogue. Anyway, great addition to the story. Hope to see more soon!
Andrew Wilton 2008-06-05 ch 1,	Another masterpiece. MAKE MORE CHAPTERS!
RedWheeler 2008-01-18 ch 5,	Out of all your works, I believe, for me, this is the hardest to follow. I think it's mainly the detail though, it can be sometimes overwhelming, but helpful at the same time for me to grasp the concept. I'm a fish out of water in this genre, basically. But I'll try my best to stick with it, just pardon my absentness. Anywho, I saw a few technical errors. Letters were sometimes missing, one sentence in particular caught my attention: "... and he was ready to die to make ure his son wet free." Everything else was peachy. Just a few minor errors like the one above. Shadorsis still kind of creeps me out. Just his initial thoughts of how he could kill Croth really stuck out. It sort of reflects on his intellect though, knowing that rather popular thought that genius and insanity are fairly close. So, if Shadorsis is so brilliant, he may be a tad bit gone. On a random note, Rahniliss seems like a cool character. I am rather fond of him. XD Don't know why though. But yes, I'm rather pleased with your decision to write the chapter on these events rather than the goblin troops. It was probably better for the flow of the story, so it isn't so jumpy. Great job!
RedWheeler 2007-09-21 ch 4,	Huh. Well... I can't say the elves didn't deserve some punishment, they were being quite racist towards Shadorsis. But there was a point when he was slicing them up - specifically the carving of the letters - that made me think that he was taking a bit too far. Hatred can do that though. I didn't really see any mistakes - nothing really stuck out to me. Except in the third paragraph, you wrote 'plood' instead of 'blood' by accident. Other than that, I can't recall anything. Well, hope to see another chapter soon! Great job!
RedWheeler 2007-09-20 ch 3,	Oh... cliffhanger! This pretty much took me an hour to read, there was a whole lot of detail into everything - which is really necessary for this particular genre of story. I only really saw a few mistakes, a "your/you're" confusion once near the beginning. Other then that... I can't remember the error, so it wasn't important I suppose. But your vocab is impressive, far out ranks mine... I always tend to use the same words with the off chance it starts to piss me off. So, glad to see I'm not reading the same few adjectives and adverbs every other paragraph. Rahniliss seemed like a pretty sweet character. I have a fondness of him; and Dragaurza was cool too. Although I think I like his brother better. Heh. Interesting names throughout the story - I'd like to know how you come up with them. Anyway, keep up the great work.
Amei666 2007-04-09 ch 2,	No, this chapter wasn't slow or pointless, really. As for grammar, I can't help you on that at all, not that grammar actually matters when there're great plots, but whatever floats your boat... So, I don't know what else to say really except what I've said before so... yeah...
Amei666 2007-04-09 ch 1,	Hey, sorry for not reviewing sooner. Easter weekend's busy... Anywya, this has improved since last time (not that it wasn't good before) and I'm glad you've restarted it. Although you went into detail at the beginning, I think it fit in well. Well, I'm not good at ending reviews so...
RedWheeler 2007-04-05 ch 2,	Well, I'll get the minor mistakes I found out of the way first. The first thing I saw was a "your" and "you're" confusion. The line was "Your just lucky-" when it should really be "your" as in "you are just lucky". The second is so minor, I don't know if you would count it or not. But you ended a bracket with a period when that is un-necessary I believe: (The only reason he had kept his athletic build.), I'm almost positive you don't need ending punctuation. And lastly you forgot ending quotation marks when Seri was speaking once: "... I probably wouldn't have needed you to lose control on them." But that's all I found. Anywho, I'm running out of time on the computer, so I'll make this as brief as possible. I think Drazura BlackGate is an amusing character, my favourite so far. You can tell by how this is written that all the characters were crafted carefully to make the unique. The detail, again, is amazing. And I can't wait to see more from you.
RedWheeler 2007-04-03 ch 1,	Your efforts with this story, I realized, are very evident when I was reading this. You can see the time and thought spent with every detail: what was spoken, the characters, the scenery. I don't think I ever read the original, but I think there were probably expansions containing details that helped portray the overall appeal of the prologue - I'm saying it was well written in case I messed it up somehow. Heh. The only minor problem I found was at the very beginning when it lists characters vaguely and states something about them, to break the confusion you probably should've used semi-colons to express that you're talking about another individual now. But other than that, extremely well written. Great job!
KaizenYokoshima 2007-04-01 ch 1,	You and me both, that review that you're talking about, harsh but true, just what we needed, eh? Monsters that deny the laws of physics and such and make our incredibly limited perception of normality obsolete and taboo? I like. Looking forward to the rest. Dude, gotta watch the grammer conflicts (Remember what I told you before about you're/your) Other than that, your setting description which was so blatantly indignified by reviews last time works well enough as not to distract, fits the situation right and then some. Was wondering when I'd get the chance to read this again, just hope that your breaks between updates don't rival mine!
Reject Code 2007-04-01 ch 1,	OOh very good bro. This Shadorsis fellow has a short temper. What a kwijibo XD wait...he's not a big,dumb,balding,north american ape...with no chin...and a short temper. XD So yeah..I still say you should just finish Tainted before you continue with this one...but anyhoo, great job and I'll talk to you in a couple of seconds...wait, right now. Later. -em?

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