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| jessica hunter 2007-04-06 ch 1,  | dang gurl talk about an imagination |
| failte200 2007-04-03 ch 1,  | Aw... that was sweet. All your stuff is so SHORT! One nit - by bolding the key-words from the hero's Perfect Boy, you're sort of bashing us in the face with it when those items come up again. Would've been better to pick more odd-sounding attributes... like.. oh... "cold-stormy eyes" instead of just "stormy eyes", and then repeat THEM instead. |
| Orangeena 2007-04-03 ch 1, | So great! Kind of dirty-romantic... a very enjoyable read. Is this the end? If so, too bad. It would have been cool to know more about them. But it's very nice the way it is. Cheers ;) |
| Somewhere In Between 2007-04-01 ch 1, | awwe this was realy cute.. and very well written as well good job! --Alex |