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| dreamshell 2007-05-20 ch 1,   | I never reviewed this? What?? My utmost apologies. This was another gem for you, I think. Your knack for interesting details (as opposed to details for details' sake, I guess) is amazing. And I love the end and the idea of Spiner being something not-quite-human. Also like the "ums" and the occasional repeating of parts of dialogue he does. Most people would say that's not the way a person should write, but I've always been into that, since it's how people really talk. Anyways, great story. Can't believe I never reviewed it until now. --dreamshell-- |
| Jon Emery 2007-04-23 ch 1, | This piece shouldn't be called Bright... it should be called Hot. The writing is spot-on, the reader is instantly attracted to Spiner, even though they probably shouldn't be. I liked the idea of sex on the beach taking a turn for the creepy, of this American youth becoming some kind of incubus. Minimal dialogue works well next to your powerful description. |