It was a great story. If you ever wanted to extend it the potential is there. It is sad that the daughter thought she had stick around to protect her mother from her father. Keep writing, if you decide to add on to the story please let me know. I will definitely read the rest.

Out of 10, I'd give this an overall rating of 7 (which is actually very good, as I'm a hard rater).

Firstly, excellent starter. The first sentence piqued my interest, compelled me to read more. You didn't simply jump into the story. You began subtly, drawing the reader in, until I felt completely immensed in a surreal world where I literally pictured mist around the car wreck. You began by introducing a universal theme - death and the poignant loss that ensues. Well done.

This piece strikes me as unique. Many works I've read that explore this kind of topic merely begin as "My life was great. Then I committed suicide/died in tragic accident/oh my god im so sad what am i going to do."

The only thing I suggest is the ending. You started out strong, but for some reason I feel dissatisfied with the events leading up to the ending.

"Her smile brightened, and for a second, I could swear she heard me."
^was great. But here:

"The next morning, while her husband was at work, my mother paid a visit to a divorce attorney... [rest of paragraph]"

The rest of the story has a wistful, detached air. Suddenly in this paragraph you slap the reader with reality, almost like bringing it all down to earth. Perhaps you shouldn't start it out with "the next morning," followed by a concrete sequence of events. I liked your initial subtlety.

But overall, nice job!

That's sad. But I like it. I love your description of feeling of being dead, with part of the soul missing. Its so.. hmm... Realistic? :)

I highly enjoyed it. It makes it so unique with your use of advanced vocabulary. A well-written story.