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| Green Eyed Angel 2008-09-11 ch 11,   | No, I love this ending! It's so mushy and cute and all that I love it. Just the way I like my endings. I really love this story. In fact, I like it so much I favorited it. I've got a lot to say to you, like how much i liked the story, but that'll just bore you. Take care! Peace! |
| XSpiderMonkeyX 2008-09-06 ch 11, | AHH!! Loved it =] |
| Jo-yi 2008-08-16 ch 11, | this is such a cute story^^, g'job! loved it. |
| rachely 2008-05-17 ch 11, | it was a good story but i didnt like the ending. it just ended so abruptly. it was good though :) |
| Cantbelieveit 2008-05-11 ch 11, | Hey. well i saw this story on someones favorites and the summary sounded like the kind of story i like to read. So i went ahead and did. Im sorry to say, but i have no idea why all of these people are saying that this story is amazing and they love it. While you have a good idea of a story the way you developed it wasnt good at all. It seems like its written by a pre-teen and its so cliche is hurts. Dont get me wrong, i absoulutly love cliche. But this was just wayy overloaded. And hosently some of it didnt make that much sense either- the many kisses were made to sound passionate and were abrupt which didnt help becuase then the ending kiss lost its spark. Also, the ending was rushed- the whole Lucas part coulda been more thorough. And what happens with rachel? Does Allie forgive her? Becuase in a way she did exactly what shellie did. Also, i didnt like how you made allie so perfect- everyone likes her, they all go for her ect. If she's had so many bfs then why cant she get over one and also then why does she have to practice. If hse likes tyler then why is he always the one making the moves? Why doesnt she? You really need to think this story through and go through it again and edit as well as extend or at the very least tie up the loose ends. And please, oh please, try and make it more realistic yeah? |
| Chance on Romance 2008-04-07 ch 11, | another great cliche! luv it. |
| Alenor 2008-01-31 ch 11, | heya, this was a nice fic, cya later. |
| cherrypiesizzle 2008-01-10 ch 1, | This story sounds so awesome!! Off to read ;) |
| beautyleftthemblind 2007-12-31 ch 5, | AWSOME |
| justcherica 2007-12-30 ch 11, | hey, i really liked the story... it was so cute. |
| Cupid's Jinx 2007-12-27 ch 11, | AW! That is so cute! I fluff it! XD Laurie -x- |
| krystalle101 2007-10-19 ch 1, | i like your first chapter because it is not boring and it starts out really fun and without boring me |
| kari-le 2007-09-02 ch 1, | great story |
| cherrystraw 2007-08-22 ch 11, | Aw! That was really cute! Keep writing! |
| TwilightLove 2007-08-08 ch 1, | Hahaha this story is hilarious i really enjoyed the first chapter! |