Ha ha. This put a smile on my face. The beginning was a bit rough for me, but you definitely progressed with the quality of the writing. I LOVE how you personify the thunder and then we, as readers, find out that it is in fact a person... nice. I also love the main character's unique name. I thought you could be a little more creative with the name calling, especially since they are "other worldly," but I really liked the descriptive verbs you use to depict the chase. I also really liked the ending and the phrase, "...where in the galaxy could that boy be from." I think you could do something really cool with this plot. Happy writing.