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| MarvellousMarvin 2007-05-14 ch 1,   | oh that was good! especially the last three lines. i also loved the imagery of cracks and being hollow and painting back on the face. loved it all! |
| jojoba-music-girl 2007-04-29 ch 1, | I really really loved this one! Especially the last three lines! Great work, it'll go into my favourites! |
| Susurrus 2007-04-06 ch 1, | Nice allegory with the doll, very artsy and twistedly pretty, if that works, hah. Suitably disturbing imagery, well done! - interesting 'pregnant barbie' sidenote - good work. |
| mindOFdeliriousUNREST 2007-04-02 ch 1, | oh, this is angsty, good, and nasty all rolled into one. the punctuation is good- it breaks up the poem well. nice job. paz, -the delirious one |
| PocoSnow15 2007-04-02 ch 1, | No one would want a doll like me either...this was very awesome, very original. I really liked the idea of the paint running in the rain...wow, awesome job! Props for doing something different! |
| xDancingintheRainx 2007-04-02 ch 1, | I really like this piece. You painted a very clear picture and I like the symbolism that (I think) you showed. I like poetry such as this that can be interpreted into different meanings. Some of my favorite lines are: "And they all know that you are hollow inside. Fake would be an understatement; In the rain, your colors melt and run like tears, And you paint your face back on like it's okay." Excellent work! |