Hah. Nice. It's about time the night stopped being young. Concise and beautiful.
~Thursday

Clever.

Wow! That was awesome! I love the night time, it's so wonderful... I know a lot of people who would agree with it, it's very real... The night definitely is an adolescent.

Wow. Really creative and unique! The flow was perfect for this type of piece and I really like the words you used. My favorite lines are:
"but it blanketed its grassy nails
with black
it drank the sun's tequila,
the night is an adolescent.
(and so are we)"
Excellent job!

This made me kinda laugh.
Which might be a bad thing.
Because there's a lot of sadness in this, also.
But it's pretty beautiful, so good job.