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| Guardrail 2007-10-10 ch 1,   | This was really interesting and different to read. I really like your imagery, and the words in the parenthesis were placed very effectivly. I liked this a lot. Great work, this is very well written. Keep writing! |
| Fractured Illusion 2007-07-26 ch 1, | I think you used the "float float away" phrase far too much to leave an impact. When you overuse something like that, as I said, the impact lessen drastically. The story was still quite wonderful though. I liked the person's thoughts, most original. Keep it up! |
| .dear. Disaster 2007-07-22 ch 1, | Beautiful. |