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| L. X. Petrik 2007-04-02 ch 1,   | Yank out the last three lines. It leaves you with a weak ending. Otherwise, very good strong words. You paint the picture with vivid detail. It's also a differnt sort of poem. Not that love poems are bad (**, I'm the queen of love/angst poems), it's just refreshing to read something else for a change. |