Great beginning and well written. :o)

I think this definitely has some potential. :) I actually just read this earlier today, and thought it was really funny that you read one of mine!
LC

I really like this story so far. It only took until that first break for me to really get interested in what happens next, with the "BANG". Good hook. Please keep it coming. I definitely want to hear Emily's character develop, along with her relationship with Alex.

I'll be waiting for chapter 2!

Emotional beginning. You've set up a pretty dark premise for Emily. I wonder where the story's going from here.