I don't know about going on yahoo to write. I'm pretty content on FP and FF. And I can't read any more unless I'm a member so I guess this is the end of this. makes sad face. oh well, see u around, Alice. btw, cool name.
Ghosts Love Me

I can agree with that tip. This is good. I was just awed into silence reading this. You really are a spectacular writer. I was so captivated with this story. Her run-ins with death are nicely described and I actually feel concern for her. It's important to get readers to connect with the story and you did that perfectly. Just awesome. I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Ghosts Love Me

AW you're not updating here anymore?

And im sorry, if your looking for secure, dont post your story anywhere on the internet. Nothing is secure here, not even online banking.

So she loves Death? But she's staying with Zach? O.o

*is confused*

Well... maybe some day I'll find out fore sure...

A fitting end, really. I had to read it twice, though. Rather confusing.
It's tragic, a child having a child.

Ah nicesh. She's finally going to be forced to choose something, no? She's really a pitiful character. Not that it's a jab at your writing skills. Just the way she is~ She hasn't quite grown up yet, allowing herself to be with one, then the other.

It just seems wrong for her to be with Zach. And you make that rather clear.

Zach seems really misguided, and Death seems too much of a child to really be in love. But talk about the ultimate sacrifice of love~ if she were to choose Death.
She should really walk her own path!

I like how you don't describe her long blonde hair with natural black streaks or her lean muscled body or her lovely little toes or any of that crap.
It would be nice to have something to work with, however.
Would make the story fuller for you to describe what it is she does during the day besides running from death. Hobbies, maybe, and where is her money coming from?

Purty story you have there!
"You're a bitch little nymph" seems really weird as little nymph is something of a fond nickname, no? The words just contradict each other.
Other than that~ cool stuff. Weird that she doesn't have any friends, but it makes the character more interesting.

that was a very interesting story is all I could say I cant describe it any other way

Interesting. I like your way of writing Alice. You got balls, girl, lol. You're not afraid to take the ending that you know some people don't want. That's what I like to look for in fanfiction is actual realistic fanfiction. Not always the cliche happily ever after. I do hope though that someday you'll be able to revisit this story and fill in the gaps. I had really wanted to know whose kid she was having, but it's all cool. That's so awesome; I don't know if I ever remember hearing the main character's name before now. It's the same as mine, wahoo! Only I spell m name w/ an 'h.' Looking forward to reading more of your stuff! :D

Wow, I have to say you're story is quite interesting.
The last chapter was quite evil with the ending XD
I hope you can post the other chapters soon :D

OMG thats such an evil thing to leave behind ... the teaser was evil. So she's pregnant ... and now the wait begins to find out where the story is going to go.

Who does she love? No one? Only herself ..? I guess she's just too into protecting herself then, she wants to be with whoever protects and make her feel safe, but she can't seem to actually love anyoen ... I wonder if she will fall in love eventually. I vote Death~ I just love the bad one ... The good one is not truly innocent, and the bad one is not truly evil.

Will be waiting for updates~

Hmm, this is a really enthralling beginning. I love the idea of death being an actual person (of sorts). I love the premise - wonderful job. I'll definitely be back for more.

Cheers!
Sammy