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| London Blaise 2007-06-14 ch 1,  | abuseWell, Vincere, I was revisiting your profile, and I found this piece. Read it, liked it a great deal, and thought I'd let you know! It seems that minimalism is a literary trait of yours. Your sentences are brief and abrupt, and you do not add words or phrases that are unnecessary. I liked that the details of this woman - her appearance, her life history - are revealed to the reader as she remembers them, almost as if we are both waking from a dream. In fact, there is a dreamlike quality to this whole story which is very enjoyable. The imagery you use is vivid, the metaphors fresh, and the visuals appear on the page (or screen, rather) as though I am feeling them rather than reading them. There is also a pronounced sensuality about Seth O'Malley, but it never appears vulgar - I suppose that has much to do with the fact that nothing is ever said straight out in this story, and I like that very much. I am a little bewildered about where this story is going as far as the plot is concerned, but I don't feel as if it matters. I'm just enjoying the way these words sound together, the way they look on the page, and the pictures they paint. I sincerely hope you will continue this story - to be frank, I'm astounded more people haven't reviewed this. It's intricate, fascinating, and, somehow, very profound. |
| Viresse430 2007-04-12 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was...interesting. Weird. Well, go write more, you're pretty damn good at it, so I think that would be an absolutely fantastic idea. Okay, somehow I slipped in sarcasm. Still, it was good, and different and I didn't see obvious spelling/grammar mistakes that always ** me off on this site. |