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| hirondelle89 2007-04-16 ch 1,  | abuseGood job. Your iambic pentameter is really good. I am envious. |
| Dani P 2007-04-08 ch 1, | abusei like this poem, iambic pentameter is tricky (at least for me it's quite annoying) however, Chameme, for me, detracts from the poem sense it is not a real word. other than that i love this peace. |
| Hidden Sword of Truth 2007-04-04 ch 1, | abuseYou always do such a beautiful pieces of poety. Claps and Cheers! (TSP) |
| Manuel Fajar 2007-04-04 ch 1, | abuseI like your sonnet a lot, but what is chamême ("our thought's first breath", but I can't find it anywhere in a dictionary)? The last line, "That scorns us all for our hatred of naught", somehow leaves me puzzled for haven't we (all the human protagonists of the sonnet) been fighting death? So, overall great job (perhaps tweek the last line?)!! m |