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| Nat Nair 2008-02-16 ch 1,  | abuseI think you can improve this piece by replacing "cancer stick" with something else--that phrase is just too trite to be effective. |
| Aquafied 2007-04-09 ch 1, | abusetonight i have read over ten stories of some sort of addiction or another it was vastly inspiring but it hurts |
| Hidden Sword of Truth 2007-04-04 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully written and smoking isn't good you are right about that. Best Wishes! *TSP* |