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| Angelic Lucifer 2007-09-03 ch 1,   | m, the flow is marvelous. i particularly like the repetition of the opening line. not to be super picky, but: "You had cut the line." -- maybe "drew" instead of "cut"? i'd love to read some of your fiction -- sorry my poetry review isn't the greatest. |
| PB 2007-04-04 ch 1, | It was LONG!! but interesting and so you. Some of the lines did not make sense to me but im not a writer! GO CHEESE! (no im not hyper...can others read this.) ANYWAY, for example the line "surely, i though, you would lose" but agian I NEVER write. |