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Reviews For: Helena

Devil's Playground
2007-11-04
ch 1,
Although the big chunk of text is a little intimidating, this story is absolutely beautiful. It ties in the song wonderfully, and yet tells a story all its own at the same time. The imagery is wonderful and the ending is satisfying. Lovely, I'm favoriting this. :)
Quinty
2007-11-02
ch 1,
I absolutely LOVE this song. I feel you captured the emotions of the song and mixed them in the story very well. Your descriptions are lovely :)

It definately touches the heart.
ReadTheBook
2007-09-18
ch 1,
Uhm, let me give you some critique...when a story is in format like that, with no spaces or indentations, it makes the readers become unfocused and it makes your story hard to read. Consider making indentations. I loved your story line, though. enthralling.
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